Wednesday 24 February 2010

Anyone bored??

Ok if anyone is bored this evening and fancy reading some cheesey crap, please take a look at this short story. I really, really need to know what bits I should change/keep, if anything is confusing, if the ending is rushed (which I think it is).Comments are very, very welcome.

Dwelling on the past will not change the future.



The door to Mini Movers playgroup was open. Elena stood for a few moments observing the people in the room. She was about to turn and go back to the car but her daughter Maisie was already on the slide. She swallowed and reluctantly sat on an empty chair next to the other mothers.

She sat listening to the other women’s conversations. It was hard to hear properly, the room was filled with the sounds of young children crying, shrieking and screaming. One voice triumphed over the noise. It was coming from a woman in her late twenties. Her hair was limp and greasy, and scraped back off her face. Her bare arms were decorated with unsightly tattoos. The woman’s laugh sounded like a witches cackle. Occasionally the woman would shout out “bloody dickhead” or “sperm donor twat”. Elena did not like the look of the women in the room. Most of the women were young mothers and all of the women were dressed slovenly and cheaply.

Elena was not like the other women. She had had a decent childhood. Her parents had always been wealthy, and she had always lived in a nice area. Her husband had left her two months ago. He hadn’t left her for another woman; he had left her because he couldn’t cope with her mood swings. Elena had been telling herself it was temporary, and that he would soon come back. Last week he had suggested selling the house, and she had realised that their marriage was truly over.

She was watching her daughter run around with a little boy, unaware that she was being spoken to. “Are you from the Lodge?” the voice said. It was the woman with the tattoos who had been speaking. “I’m sorry, I was miles away, no I live on the Meadow view estate”. “Ooooh we got a posh one here girls” the tattooed woman mocked. “I’m Dee” she said. Dee pointed to a thin woman with dirty blonde hair and said “this is Shell”. An overweight red head piped up and said “Fine don’t introduce me then Dee, you bitch. I’ll introduce me bloody self. I’m Kelly”.

Elena smiled half heartedly at the women. She was thinking of making an excuse and leaving. “How many kids you got then?”Shell asked. Elena pointed at Maisie and said “just the one, Maisie her name is, she’s two”.

“Just the one! Bloody ell what a piece of piss, I got five little buggers me!” Shell said. Elena was worried if she looked at the women the wrong way she would get a punch in the face. Dee seemed to be the ring leader; whenever she spoke the other women gave her their undivided attention. Shell was busy cleaning chocolate off her son’s face, whilst a young mixed race girl was tugging at her leg. She looked up and said “you coming tomorrow?” Elena replied with a nod and a half hearted smile. Elena noticed out of the corner of her eye that Dee was watching her, it made Elena uneasy.

The morning had dragged, in the safety of her car Elena let out a huge sigh of relief. She had no idea what had happened to make Dee so angry with everyone and everything yet she understood Dee’s pain. Listening to the other women talk about their lives had made her feel better about her own situation. They had it much worse.

Elena hated being at home all the time. Her friends rarely bothered with her since Maisie had been born, they were all too busy with their careers. That evening she did something she had never done on her own before, she drank until she was pissed. She sat pouring glass after glass of the cheap supermarket wine, sinking it down as fast as she could in-between her sobs. The drink dulled her pain and during that short space of time it offered her a release from her thoughts, a break from her organised mind. But that voice was still there in the back of her mind, the voice that never allowed her to let go. The voice that reminded her she was a mother, and mothers should not get pissed on their own while their children sleep. The same voice that made her believe she was a failure, that her husband left her because she was a bad person.

She had thought of suicide before, but actually carrying it out, well, no she had never tried to take her own life. She would sit and think about the pros and cons of suicide. The one thing, the only thing that stopped her from attempting anything was Maisie. The thought of never seeing her daughter again was sickening. And then there were the practicalities to consider. How would she do it? What if she decided to go ahead but changed her mind half way through? Death terrified her, but the thought of just existing scared her more.

Maisie’s cries woke her up. She opened one eye and looked around. She had fallen asleep on the sofa. She stood up slowly and started to make her way upstairs. Her daughter’s cries were frenzied now, desperate. “Alright, I’m coming. Mommy’s coming”.

Maisie’s nappy was heaving with shit. It had seeped out around the sides and was all over her pyjama bottoms. The smell made Elena heave; she had to run to the bathroom to throw up. When she had finished she returned to her daughter’s bedroom and proceeded to clean her up. Elena tried to push the feelings of guilt to one side. She had been that pissed last night that an earthquake would not have roused her from her sleep. Elena knew she had to go to Mini Movers today. Those women were all she had, her only connection to the outside world, even if they were everything that Elena was not.

She could hear Dee’s cackle before she had even opened the door and entered the room. She saw Dee, Kelly and Shell in the far corner of the room and went over to join them. There was a free seat next to Kelly. “Hi Kelly, ok for me to sit here?” she asked. Kelly just shrugged her shoulders, Elena assumed that meant yes.

“Well well, we didn’t think you’d be back” Dee said. Dee stared at Elena for a few moments; she was trying to work out who Elena really was, whether Elena was somebody she could be friends with. Finally she said “Us lot are going back to my flat for a cuppa after here, you wanna come?” Elena had her doubts. Did she really want to get involved with these women? She didn’t exactly have many friends right now. This thought saddened Elena, she smiled at Dee and said “Sure. I’d like that”.

The first thing Elena noticed when she pulled up outside Dee’s flat was a blood stained mattress dumped on small patch of knee high grass. Vodka bottles and lager cans were scattered across the concrete path, a grey plant pot filled with rain water and hundreds of cigarette nubs was balanced on top of an overflowing dustbin. Elena rang the doorbell, her head was itching. She felt dirty just standing outside the flat. Inside was no better. The place reeked of damp and fags. The net curtains were yellow and too short for the windows. There was one worn floral sofa pushed up against a fuchsia pink wall. The other walls in the sitting room were lime green, with big chunks of plaster missing out of the walls.

Kelly and Shell were in Dee’s kitchen, drinking tea and smoking round a small white table. Dee gave Elena a cup of tea, Elena could not help but wonder if the mug was clean. Dee’s son came into the kitchen holding a beaker up and whinging at Dee. He must have been about three, maybe four, yet he didn’t know how to speak. Dee snatched the beaker off him and filled it with coca cola. “Here ya ginger bastard, now piss off and leave mommy alone” she growled at him. The little boy started drinking from the beaker and pulling on his ear, Dee shouted “are you still here?” Defeated the boy turned and walked out of the kitchen, obeying his mothers commands.

Shell stood up and walked over to a work surface, she asked Dee if she could borrow a fiver. Elena watched in amazement as Shell proceeded to roll the five pound note up into what resembled a straw. Shell bent over the work surface and snorted a line of white powder up through her left nostril in one clean go. “Oi you ! Save some for the rest of us, I’ve only got half a gram left and I aint getting anymore off Dave until later” Dee snapped. Elena had never seen anybody doing drugs before. She started to feel sick. Maisie was asleep in her pushchair, Elena prayed that Maisie would not wake up. Elena finished the rest of her tea in one gulp, and said “well thank you for your hospitality, I had better be off, I’ve got some housework to do”. “Why do you speak so prim and proper Elena?” Dee said. “Have you ever tried a bit of sniff? Or any drugs at all?”

“No. No I haven’t.” Elena said, surprised by the venom in her voice. “Aint you just a little bit curious about what it would be like?” Kelly asked. “Can’t say I am” Elena lied. She was curious, but it was wrong. Drugs were wrong; her parents had drilled that into her head from a very young age. “What’s your story Elena? We know nothing about you” Shell said whilst rubbing her nose. “There’s not much to tell really, I live on my own with Maisie”.

“In a posh shiny detached house no bet, with a block paved drive and pretty pot plants by the glossy red front door” Dee sneered. “Something like that” Elena said. “What’s your problem with me Dee?”

“I aint got a problem with you hunny bun, I’m just jealous of your perfect life.”

“Jealous? What’s there to be jealous off? Yes I live in a nice house, in a nice area, but it’s a house I can’t afford. In fact the bailiffs are likely to come knocking any day now. I can’t afford to run my car, and my husband has left me” Elena said, her voice shaking. “Alright love, calm down” Shell giggled. “Fuck off Shell”. Elena blurted out, surprised at herself, and scared she was going to get a slap. Dee and Kelly burst out laughing. Shell’s mouth was open then nervously she started laughing too, copying the others. Elena couldn’t help but laugh, for the first time in ages she had stood up to somebody. She was relieved it hadn’t backfired on her.

With a sudden rush of new found confidence, Elena asked Dee for a cigarette. She had smoked as a teenager, but had given up when she had met Christopher. He didn’t approve of smoking. The fag tasted worse than she remembered, she had to struggle to control the urge to cough. The nicotine rush made her feel woozy, eventually the feeling went, and Elena found she was enjoying the fag. Yes, Elena felt empowered. She felt like she was saying a big ‘fuck you’ to her husband, to her parents, to all the people who expected her to act a certain way.

Dee smiled a sly smile at Elena and winked. Elena realised she had been accepted by Dee, that Dee and herself had more in common than she first thought. Dee was bad for her, she knew that, but there was something about her that drew Elena in. “Come on Elena, try a line. What’s the worst than can happen? You won’t get addicted from one line, I promise you. It will help you forget about all the shit you have got going on”. Dee said. Checking that Maisie was still asleep Elena accepted Dee’s offer. She felt like an idiot snorting the powder up, she had to do it in stages unlike Shell who had hoovered it up like a pro. The cocaine tasted vile, and Elena couldn’t understand why anybody would want to sniff it on a regular basis. She felt so guilty and irresponsible; she couldn’t shut her conscious off. Then the drug started to kick in, she felt her shoulders loosen and her legs begin to twitch.

She began talking rapidly, about nothing in particular, just grateful to be involved, to feel important, wanted. Dee was right she didn’t feel like she needed to do anymore of the drug she wasn’t addicted. Elena knew she would do more though; she didn’t want to go home just yet and be alone. She thought about calling up Christopher or her mom, to arrange for someone to have Maisie. But they would have asked too many questions. No, Maisie would have to stay here with her. Just for another hour or so, then they would go home.

Three hours later Elena glanced at her watch. She had been having a laugh exchanging stories about childbirth, relationships, sex and money. Maisie had woken; Dee gave her some monster munch and a beaker of milk. Elena knew Maisie needed to go home and have her dinner; selfishly she ignored this maternal instinct. One more glass of wine, and they would go. The drive wasn’t far, ten minutes at the most. Maisie was tired, hungry and wet, and screaming for her mother’s attention. For the first time ever Elena swore at her daughter. She didn’t know whether she had done it to show off in front of the others, or whether being with the women for a few hours had changed the way she spoke. Either way she hated herself for it.

The drive home was eventful, Elena mounted curbs and drove through red lights, but she made it home. She knew today was a one off, she would never drink drive again, she was well aware of how lucky she was for not getting caught. Giving Maisie her dinner had been a struggle. Elena swayed as she fed her daughter, she could not wait for Maisie to go to sleep. She had started to see her daughter as an inconvenience. When Maisie had finally got off to sleep, Elena sat in front of her TV and lit a fag that Dee had given her. She was itching for a glass of wine, but had nothing in the house to drink. The off licence was a five minute walk from her house.

She sat thinking about what to do. If she didn’t get any wine or fags she would crave them all night. If she did go out to get some, it would mean leaving her daughter alone. Before she could change her mind, she quickly stubbed the fag out on a plate and pushed the plate on the sofa, grabbed her purse and keys and ran out of the house. The walk to the off licence was further than she remembered. When she got there she grabbed the first bottle of red wine she could see. The fresh air was sobering, she realised what she had done and started to run. Her legs screamed at her and her chest rattled, tears flooded down her cheeks as she thought of her daughter all alone. Exhausted, she had to slow her pace. She had reached the bottom of a steep hill that led up towards her street.

An old man watched her walk past as he preened the roses in his immaculate front garden. She knew why he was watching her, she looked like a trespasser; she did not belong in this neighbourhood anymore. She began to run once more, she wanted to hold her baby and tell her how much she loved her, how she was so very sorry. She turned onto her street, and heard the shrill sound of sirens. Instinctively she knew. The scene that awaited her was like something out of a movie. A crowd of people had gathered outside her house, they watched open mouthed as she pushed past them towards the flames.

Smoke intoxicated her lungs; she tried to scream but was only able to produce a curdled squeak. The heat was fierce, it tore across her skin. A fire fighter pulled her back, she kicked and slapped him shrieking “my daughter’s in there.”

Time stood still. She fell to the floor and watched motionless as they tried to attack the ferocious flames. Two men emerged from the wreckage, carrying a lifeless bundle. Fear pulsed through her body as she watched a paramedic try to resuscitate the one person that she had truly loved. She ran over to Maisie and grabbed her limp, lifeless hand. “Please baby, I’m sorry. Please mommy needs you, please don’t leave me” she squeaked between heaving sobs. The paramedic had stopped trying to resuscitate. “What are you doing, why have you stopped. She’s dying she’s a baby, do something” she screamed. The paramedic shook his head.

The ambulance crew placed a crisp white sheet over the tiny, grey body. Elena watched in horror as they put her daughter inside the ambulance. “No, no. You’re wrong. She’s not dead, she’s just a baby. She’s not dead. She needs her bunny; she will be scared without it” Elena sobbed. “I’m coming with you” she blurted. “I’m afraid we can’t let that happen” a voice from behind her said.“It was an accident. I’ve never left her alone before, it was a mistake. Please, I’m a good person. I love my daughter, she needs me ....please” Elena’s voice trailed off as her hands were cuffed. She watched in silence as the ambulance drove away. “It was a silly mistake, just a silly mistake. I’m a good person, I’m a ......no, no it’s all wrong, she’s not, no n......”

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